Travis1
:) good development of the plot and characters and their relationships. The story is getting better as I read. Be on the look out for ur spelling and grammar, the more fluent a story reads the better. Lastly don't be afraid to describe important bits of the story like in this chapter the main character and Nate suddenly kiss. The story is comming along real nicely nae;) keep up the good work :). You have always had this flare for writing keep up the good work.