statlex

Hi,
          	I haven't been online for a couple of months and I've come back to my stories, ready to write. But I need some advice with my work! I would greatly appreciate any corrections or advice about my work :)
          	Thanks

Beatrice_Tucker

Hey @statlex. I think your stories are great! I was going to say I think you need to bring in the boy in gold chains in sooner but after just reading the first chapter it is clear that you already did that. I think that the changes you made were great. Please, please, please update! The only thing I think you need to work on is leaving out miscellaneous words so that the story flows better. Otherwise great!
          	  I am really excited for you to write dripping dry. The intro to it is awesome. So I do really think that you should work on that.  
          	  I haven't read forced yet but don't worry, I will. Keep going. Your writing is awesome. From Bea Tucker
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Beatrice_Tucker

Hey @statlex.
          I think your writing is awesome. My first reaction was to say how I thought that GOld chains need to introduce the male character in earlier but I just re-read chapter one and I can see that you have made some changes so I think that is great! All I want to say is that I think you need to work on getting rid of your miscellaneous words so that it flows better. You are doing well but I think that you could do more. 
          Dripping dry sounds super cool and I am crazy excited for you to update it. Please do soon.
          I haven't read forced yet but I am sure it is good.
          I thought that your short story was really good. Maybe if there were more techniques to emphasize the points of war and the other themes too would make it a little more interesting.
          YOUR WRITING IS GREAT... so please keep writing and updating. 
          From Bea Tucker

statlex

Hi,
          I haven't been online for a couple of months and I've come back to my stories, ready to write. But I need some advice with my work! I would greatly appreciate any corrections or advice about my work :)
          Thanks

Beatrice_Tucker

Hey @statlex. I think your stories are great! I was going to say I think you need to bring in the boy in gold chains in sooner but after just reading the first chapter it is clear that you already did that. I think that the changes you made were great. Please, please, please update! The only thing I think you need to work on is leaving out miscellaneous words so that the story flows better. Otherwise great!
            I am really excited for you to write dripping dry. The intro to it is awesome. So I do really think that you should work on that.  
            I haven't read forced yet but don't worry, I will. Keep going. Your writing is awesome. From Bea Tucker
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