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 Kainaat Aur Ishq 
          
          "Love is never simple when obsession meets destiny…"
          
          She thought she knew love—until he entered her life. Mysterious. Dangerous. Unrelenting. A man who doesn’t ask… he takes.
          
          She writes about passion, but he’s ready to show her what true desire feels like. His eyes follow her every move. His presence lingers in the shadows. She should run… but why does she feel drawn to the fire?
          
           A dark romance packed with obsession, mystery, and a love that burns beyond control.
           8 chapters are out! Will you dare to step into their world?
          
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JMBailee

The Sweater is a cute scene, but it felt a little out of context after the last chapter. It seems like their interactions are sometimes out of order.  Like she hates the boss, understands the boss, back to stage one, then it seems like we jump to an interaction that should be later in the book and back again. The transitions in their relationship feel a bit disjointed. I am enjoying it overall, but if you decide to go back, that would be my recommendation of what to look for. Smoothing out the emotional transitions and the motivations behind them.

JMBailee

Feel free to comment or give constructive criticism on my work as well. I'd love the feedback.
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