S.S Sullivan

i absolutely adore your ‘He loves me, He loves me not’ story  

I just published 3 chapters of my new book, The Summer Before 8th Grade. I made this book a while back. However I had been debating whether  Or not I should possibly it as the story is very personal to me. I decided though, that I wanted to share it. I really want to see what people think of the story. So please check it out. It would be very much appreciated if you do. Comment what your thoughts are about it.
          https://my.w.tt/Y5BLBROxbU

I just feel upset, and I don’t understand why.

Going on a cruise. Boarding the ship today. Won't be able to talk for 5 days. Marry Christmas everyone!

@justdiino 
          Also, make sure to have your words in a tense.
          Past tense,
          Present tense.
          “Was” “did” 
          “Ing”

@justdiino 
          No problem.
          So I’m seeing you need to fix your capitalization. Every word of a new sentence needs to be capitalized, names of people and place as well need to be capitalized. 
          (‘s) is to show owner ship. “Customer’s order”
          Sentence structure is very important. Make it easy to read and have a nice flow, you don’t have to use extensive metaphors and similes. 
          You need to to start a new paragraph every time a new character is talking.
          
          For example, 
          
          I grinned widely, just as he entangled our hands together while we walked home after our date.
          
          “I had a really great time with you, thank you,” I solemnly whisper to him. He shook his head just as we made it to my front door.
          
          “No, thank you. Tonight was really great. I hope to see you again soon.” He spoke softly to me, his eyes in a dream daze.
          These are just the basics of writing. A well written story always starts with a hook. Something to keep the readers reading. Lay out a scene for your readers. Paint a picture for them. Use sensory detail, tone, mood. So the reader can be enthralled with your writing. Have a good pace with your story. Have conflicts, don’t go to fast. Build relationships with characters and have the characters speak in a way actual people talk. Give them human emotions. Make a character people will like and or relate with. Give them character traits and of course flaws.
          That’s all, hope you do well with your writing.

I’m struggling here just to get a fancafe account. I can’t read a thing

@-shishtar Thank you, that’s really nice of you to say. I love BTS and Cardi B especially her new song Money.

I just wrote a BTS parody song for the song Billionaire by Bruno Mars

I’m making the decision to start working out more and eating super healthy like I use to. I’ve taken 2 months off, and I’ve gain back some weight. Track can’t be my only exercise. It’s going to be hard but I know I can do it❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ It’s been 10 long months, my New Years  resolution last year was to be the best version of myself and I’m not going to let myself down!