sushii

@xXDeasVailXx np!:)

nihcelpud

Here is my critique for Girl Meets Boy. It sounds great, is well organized, and uses some good similes and metaphors. Most of all, you capture the characteristics of the girl and the situation she is in. All I would change is the wording on a couple of your sentences in the beginning and end, because they were hard to read. If it doesn't flow, change it or get rid of it.