sushiramentiko

i published my first story please give me criticism and feedback!! 
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/299858955?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=emmydomii&wp_originator=iQY24FD04M4js419wiAcmDz%2FWpy6tv3NJSw3PlcuPLpjJBzJyJbAANQh%2F%2BPRooGxQsBAtuuLHw9xY1c0kmoPBEETQbTl3d80epKehxZi2Kst4hfZ9dPDnT%2FG53d%2FRp12

Hey would you like to check out my friend's book..she just started her first taekook fanfic if you want then please check it out don't ignore she needs(◠﹏◠)
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/240474985?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=taekookacc&wp_originator=TRcrOexYzFAqCmlXpDEVH0YK4APd9CQ0476oJ1loM5y%2FziPT7AsD0uwq0DW6a54ANvFRqM95fY9M6jXVu%2B02UQrVZMTFLuDNr3t00%2BiDpPy0R%2B8H4wFb3yY37PABo42I