dayshepard
Hey Sorry to be a bother. If you don't mind, do you think you can check out my new book. If not, that's totally fine. I just would like feed back and see if the first chapter would actually interest people into reading it.. ✨
dayshepard
@Mua_Forever if yoU have the time to point out those errors that would be great too. :-) ✨✨
sweet_creature_x
@Mua_Forever It isn't a bother at all! I actually just read the first chapter! I think it has a lot of potential, and I'm excited to see where you're going to go with it. The only thing I would say you could do differently, is add more description. And there were a few grammatical errors, but other than that I thought it was great, and you should definitely keep going! :D