sweet_lil_lilly

Hello! Sorry for getting back to you so late. I lost the thread.
          
          Here's the remake: http://i1080.photobucket.com/albums/j335/HunnayCakes/DoubleTime2.png

@angelmessenger7 Yah, my concern was if it was just too random and all. I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks a ton for sharing your thoughts on it!

@possie9 Wow! THank you so much! I'm amazed you thought so highly of it. I wasn't sure if it all seemed too disjoint and random. I am so glad to hear you think it works. Thank you so much for taking the time to read over it and to give me your feedback and thoughts. I really appreciate it!

I liked the book Magical Mayhem very interesting kinda every where but, I truly liked it!

I have read what you have posted up so far on your book and here is what I think (I'm not lying this is my actual opinion of your story):
          
          Interest: It started of okay in terms of interest, but as your book went further it got more interesting and had more of an effect that said 'I have to read more.'
          
          Grammar: There were a few spelling errors and there was a time that you repeated a few words. There was also another when you forgot to use spaces but apart from that your grammar was very good.
          
          Plot line: Your plot line seems very interesting.
          
          Overall: It was very good and I think that if I can I might come back when you have written more and read your new bits in the story.
          
          Rating out of ten: 9

I'd be happy to critique your book. I will get back to you ASAP

Thank you for the vote on my book Barefoot Cinderella :)