syrellae

Just changed my username because the last one was just too weird...

syrellae

Hi guys!
          
          So this one's a tough decision, but I've decided to take a break from writing due to my studies. It's been challenging to balance writing and studies. I'll be back to writing by mid-March, but the chapters will be published from April. Plus I'll also edit all my current chapters first as they've many mistakes. Idk if I even have any readers, but still, if there are any, this message is for them. 
          
          Till then, signing off
          Inii~

writtenbyenn

hii! I finally got around to reading your story haha. 
          
          I really like the concept. I've honestly never read a romance with a director as the main character (considering I don't read romance much myself), but this one got me hooked from the first chapter. The opening line is intriguing and pulls me right in. Even though english isn't your first language, I think you're pretty good at it!! It flows perfectly, and you've got some good descriptions going on :)
          
          as for minor tweaking here and there, 
          
          you switch between past tense and present tense pretty frequently. Stick to past tense at all times. I also think you could cut down the bigger paragraphs so it's easier to read. And sometimes, the dialogues feel unnatural. one thing i find helpful is reading the dialogue out loud to yourself or even feeding it to a text to speech thingy. it's actually quite helpful. other than that, I'm looking forward to the story!! I can visualise everything that's happening which is a thing not many people can do. and the plot in general is pretty interesting. 
          
          that's it for now haha. good luck with your writing <3

writtenbyenn

@redroomtales_ surely!! it's pretty good now :) and I'd love for you to review mine as well when you find the time 
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syrellae

@writtenbyenn hi! Thanks for reviewing my story! I know there are many mistakes here and there in this book and I'm surely gonna edit it after the book ends❤️
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