Carly

@theCARLYcore I'm reading it right now. First thing, numerical figures are a no-no in literature unless it is a SPECIFIC date. So, it will be forty five minutes, not 45 minutes. And the tenses are a bit confused, like you said, "There she WAS, walking down....She WAS gorgeous and in forty-five minutes, she WILL be all mine" <--- See? The tenses are confused. Might fix that up a bit. I'm still reading and shall post the rest in a comment. :)

@sweetmelody1135 hey sofen. I'll make sure to comment.
          constructive criticism would be great. :) thanks

@theCARLYcore It's Sofen and sure, I'll read it. :) It's 10:43 pm over here so I can read it today. Be sure to leave comments! And do you want constructive criticism with it? 

@sweetmelody1135 yes my name is Carly. I shall check out your story. I'm sure I'll like it. 
          I was wondering if you could check out my story just that im new and all and I wanna see if this story could actually get readers. so far it's only 2 chapters but a third will be uploaded in the next 2 days. just comment what you think of it. :) 
          I shall start yours in the morning as i live in AUS and it's 3.41am right now. :)
          btw what is your name?

Hello! WELCOME TO WATTPAD! I seem to have the pleasure of being the first person to post here. Great! I am honored. :)  Anyways, I'm gonna stop messing around and get to the point -mind checking out my story "Ariadne and the Flaming Torch : The Quest"? I have great feed-back on it and if you are a paranormal junkie like me, then I think you'll like it -though, I can't decide for you. Read it; who knows? You may even enjoy it! Vote, fan and comment. And may I have the pleasure of knowing your name? It truly is too awkward to call someone by their username .:/ Unless, it's Carly. If it is, then hello Carley! :D