thearose1988

Just want to wish you all a merry Christmas 
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arsaya____

hey dear  i love if you give my book one chance
          
          Book name - The lions of rathore's 
          
          Welcome to **The Rathore Legacy**.
          
          This is not just a story about power, wealth, or the mafia world.
          
          This is the story of a family.
          
          A family feared by the world.
          A family built on loyalty, blood, sacrifice, and unbreakable bonds.
          
          The Rathores are known as kings, devils, and rulers of an empire. People fear their names, their power, and the darkness that follows them.
          
          But behind every empire lies a heart.
          
          Behind every ruthless man lies a story.
          
          And behind every legacy lies a family that would burn the world for the people they love.
          
          In this journey, you will witness love, loyalty, friendship, betrayal, heartbreak, laughter, chaos, and moments that may leave you smiling one day and emotionally damaged the next.
          
          Every brother has his own story.
          Every queen has her own strength.
          Every scar has a reason.
          
          This is the beginning of a legacy written in blood and protected by love.
          
          Welcome to the world of the Rathores.

Thefireecracker

          Empire of Ashes 
          
          Devisha is a queen.
          Born of fire, shaped by loss, and crowned with the weight of a kingdom that looks to her as its last hope. She vowed she would never kneel. Never surrender. Never let her heart become her weakness.
          
          But he returned.
          He, whose touch once burned her.
          He, whose name is lost in shadows but whose presence consumes every breath she takes.
          He, who claims her crown, her soul, her very existence as his own.
          
          When kingdoms march toward war, when blood is promised to the soil and betrayal coils like smoke in the air—Devisha must fight not only for her people, but against the man who would set the world ablaze just to keep her.
          
          His eyes follow her.
          His desire chains her.
          And his obsession will not end until she is his.
          
          This is her story.
          Of power, of betrayal, of fire… and of the love that threatens to destroy her empire.
          
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thearose1988

I need your help share read comment I appreciate it don't be shy readers my writing is not great but knowing your reading by books means so much to me
          thank you
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BibbleOnFire

@ thearose1988  you're welcome<33 thank you for accepting my feedback<33
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thearose1988

@thearose1988 I will be editing the books and thank you for your comments they do help me a lot
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BibbleOnFire

@ thearose1988  I really need to be honest with you about the text. I read the first chapter of the last book you wrote and I’m having a very hard time reading it because the sentences jump around a lot, the dialogue isn’t clear, and there’s no structure that helps me understand who is speaking or what is happening. The spelling and grammar mistakes make it even harder to follow. I’m not trying to be mean, but I just can’t keep reading something when I constantly have to guess the meaning. Your ideas are interesting, but the way it’s written right now makes it confusing and exhausting to get through. If the scenes were clearer, the dialogue organized, and the spelling cleaned up, it would be much easier to follow.
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