Bobby_Brincis
Hello Dude! ❤️
I'm currently working on a story called "Until You Arrived".
What makes this story special to me is that it features an intersex main character (Harmanpreet Karu) and a romance at its heart. I haven't come across many stories with this combination, so I wanted to create something different while also focusing on family, healing, friendship, and love.
This is my first time writing a story like this, and I would really appreciate your support. ✨
If you have some free time, please give it a read and let me know:
What you liked
What could be improved
Any mistakes you notice
Suggestions for character development or plot
Your feedback will help me grow as a writer and make the story better.
Thank you so much for your support! ❤️
Story Title: Until You Arrived
thehiddenstar_
@Bobby_Brincis Hi! Thank you for reaching out I read the first chapter and honestly I enjoyed it. The story feels interesting already and it definitely made me curious about where you're planning to take it next. What stood out to me the most was the family dynamic, especially the Bhullar sisters. Their interactions were really fun to read and I'd love to see more of their banter and relationship as the story progresses. Harman's character also caught my attention pretty quickly. She has a strong presence from the start, and there were a few hints about Smriti and her family situation that definitely made me curious. I don't think I'm experienced enough to give technical writing advice, but as a reader, the emotional and family aspects were the parts that interested me the most. Overall, I think it's a solid start and you've given readers enough questions to make them want to continue reading. Wishing you all the best with the story and thank you again for sharing it with me ✨!!!
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