therumbler

If you're a fan of superheroes, sci fi, and trippy cosmic stuff. I recommend this.
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/298028232

DarkMatter1234

Thanks so much for the follow! It really meant a lot. I’m always looking for advice on how to improve my writing so if you have any please don’t hesitate. 
          
          I read the first chapter of your GTS story it was pretty good, I really enjoyed it. I’ll make sure to read the rest and give you my advice if you want it.

therumbler

@DarkMatter1234 so far my idea for Tara is basically the opposite of Devourer, a god starting to discover her humanity, she's instead a mortal becoming a god. I do agree with your criticism, Tara's character is not properly fleshed out, although Part 1 is the shortest of the 4 parts so far. Right now I'm still not sure where to take her story, so I'll wait for your advice once you finish reading the other Parts.
            
            As for testing her limits, her reason are both curiosity and a friendly competition with her girlfriend, I believe I tried to characterize Tara as someone with a spirit for adventure.
            
            Anyway, my next story might be a journal style horror story with inspiration from Blair Witch and Resident Evil.
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