KaliaraSleath

Hey I really love your writing.But don't you think the book you are writing has no character transformation from the beginning.
          I really read through 24 chapters, deeply in love with the dynamics.
          However I saw no real change, coming in the  life after the 24th chap, 
          Out of tiredness , I skipped to the last chapter.
          There too every emotion is the same.
          
          Its like a copy of all the chapter 
          I was hooked only till the apology given by Trevor scene ...
          Please consider this as  positive criticism and give me a story that meets my expectations because of the first few chapters.
          
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KaliaraSleath

@hermioneee2204 
            
            Hi 
            That part after the Perry gala 
            Trevor would have asked formally for a time to apologise to the protagonist. And Dorothy would have brought Sebastian with her for that. 
            
            It would be a little emotional....
            As Trevor would stupidly ask if she had ever loved her 
            Then there goes all her broken heart put into words 
            
            That one
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thesummerivera

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share such thoughtful feedback. I wrote this book almost eight years ago, so I’m very aware that it has flaws, especially in terms of pacing, character development, and repetition. I’ve grown a lot as a writer since then, and I’ll be publishing new stories with much stronger pacing and character arcs very soon. I truly appreciate your honest and constructive criticism. ✨
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hermioneee2204

@KaliaraSleath when did he apologize?
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