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@Jatrisha1999 Oh and this was based off the Abnormal Teensz one :)

@Jatrisha1999 Hey Chica, Just a warning I will be brutally honest- and please just know this is the point of constructive criticism. 
          
          1| This ones just a personally opinion but I never really liked stories that spoke thoughts. I would suggest using more dialogue and/or put her thoughts in italics. 
          
          2| This ties into number one, when you do speak her thoughts use more transition words and elaborate on her thoughts. 
          
          3| So far Ive only gotten through two chapters but with grammar (do: yay! don't: yay !) having the space between it demonstrates a "younger" writer. Not having that space between shows you're more professional about your writing 
          
          4| I don't know about you but Im a sophomore in high school and I use a large vocabulary- I would suggest for commonly used words you google synonyms and try to use those. In my experience, larger words (not too many though) usually keeps me interested. 
          
          These are allI have right now, Ill update when I finished reading. Remember Im not trying to be rude or ignorant- Im just giving the advice I think about when writing my own story. 

Hey girl!!! Thanks for the follow!!! Could you check out one of my stories and give me any feedback if possible thanks again

@Ansleyyyy Sure I'll be happy to read it :)

I know this is annoying, but could you maybe read my story? I just posted it and I'd love to hear some feedback. I'd be happy to read yours too! 

@OhCuteNialler  so far the storys good, just remember dont rush anything ;) Could you read my story ,City Lights? Its very short at the moment and I need to know if I should continue or not. 
          

i like your back round, thanks for the follow :)

I just now realized I was getting all these messages and not replying. ._.

thx for following me!!!! ☺ luv ya!

Thanks for the follow boo! ♡ xx