@folashewaodekunle i think New Girl At School is good but there are a few issues I think I should point out: the grammar isn't great it definitely needs work and there isn't much of a story line. I feel like there should be a little more like, character descriptions, and maybe a character or a narrator point of view for example:
In the class room of ___ High school Marcus is talking to his friend. Marcus is the __ of the school, he has (messy, neat, beautiful) __ colored hair and __ eyes. He's wearing a __ colored shirt and ___ jeans. His friend (similar description). "Hey who was that new girl in class?" , Marcus asks (action: getting up from his chair, leaning on his desk, exc.). " Anne I think. Why'd you ask?", His friend replies (action).