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I’m honestly not happy with my writing. I feel like it’s too repetitive and the way I describe things is too complicated/confusing. Anyone have any tips on how to keep things fresh and clear?

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Thank you do much, even tho im so late oof!
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MxlkySkies

Ik you wrote this a while ago but a good thing to do is google a words definition and look at similar words that can replace the one you wanna use like ill use my own story for example I thought saying “my fake smile turned into a depression expression” sounded kind of plain so I replaced the word depression with melancholy because it’s an interesting word that makes the sentence pop more. You can also think of ways to add more detail like how something feel like “I felt a light breeze brush past my skin which sent chills down my spine” instead of just “I felt a light breeze outside” or something more romantic would be the way the persons lips taste and how describe how you admire the features on their face like I’ll use 2d as an example. “I looked at him after we had just kissed. He had a deep blush across his face which made me smile. He was so cute, his lips were so soft they felt amazing against mine. Almost as if they belonged together. I put my hand on his face and felt his warm cheek and looked deep into his black/white eyes (however you decide to perceive him in the story) and felt at home in them.” I hope this kinda helps and I hope using examples makes it better!
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ticker-tape

I’m honestly not happy with my writing. I feel like it’s too repetitive and the way I describe things is too complicated/confusing. Anyone have any tips on how to keep things fresh and clear?

ticker-tape

Thank you do much, even tho im so late oof!
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MxlkySkies

Ik you wrote this a while ago but a good thing to do is google a words definition and look at similar words that can replace the one you wanna use like ill use my own story for example I thought saying “my fake smile turned into a depression expression” sounded kind of plain so I replaced the word depression with melancholy because it’s an interesting word that makes the sentence pop more. You can also think of ways to add more detail like how something feel like “I felt a light breeze brush past my skin which sent chills down my spine” instead of just “I felt a light breeze outside” or something more romantic would be the way the persons lips taste and how describe how you admire the features on their face like I’ll use 2d as an example. “I looked at him after we had just kissed. He had a deep blush across his face which made me smile. He was so cute, his lips were so soft they felt amazing against mine. Almost as if they belonged together. I put my hand on his face and felt his warm cheek and looked deep into his black/white eyes (however you decide to perceive him in the story) and felt at home in them.” I hope this kinda helps and I hope using examples makes it better!
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