Hey
Your book desolation is really good so far. Just one thing: the alpha keeps saying meine liebe. This term is used for males adressing females. You could write liebling or liebster. Or even mein liebster. In our language we have terms for male and female. German is really complicated with this stuff. For German readers its very confusing if a male says meine liebe to a male. We will always assume he is talking to his girlfriend. Not his boyfriend. I hope i could explain what I mean. My english isnt that good..
But heads up for your story.... its really good so far
A scary two sentence story:
"Come down son, your dad and I are waiting for you," I heard my mom yell from downstairs. I froze and a chill ran down my spine because my parents have been dead for two years.
Have any others?