user02759555
Hi Tim, I read your story and I am liking it so far. You asked for some type of feedback so I will give one piece of advice to help your readers follow along better.
When you are jumping back and forth in time put the month and year of what is taking place. That will help us follow along better without feeling like we are lost. Other than that, I can't wait to read the rest.
timluce1
@user02759555 thank you Cindy, I am taking notes and everyone that offers advice will be mentioned on a page of the final draft. Thanks again, and feel free to read more as it comes available
