tonyammi

hello Death! completed ^_____^ .. try it guys :)

Mirokou27

Gud eve eybisidi09
          First I would like to say thank you for giving me the opportunity to critic your work :) 
          For me, ok naman sya, yung flow ng story ok, may element din sya :) The things lang that I think to develop more is the depth of each chapter, medyo hindi naeexplain masyado, the other one is yung characters medyo hindi nabigyan ng justice. May I suggest to add some twists to your story para mas exciting at mas kaabang abang :) so ayun lng I hope nakatulong yung critic ko :)