your book donor has a really, really beautiful concept. why did you write it like that though? one sentence per paragraph. I don't get what's going on and it kinda deters me from reading further..
Oh wow. I didn't even know people were reading it. It was a book idea that I wanting to keep writing, but if I wrote it in paragraphs I probably wouldn't finish it. Thanks for the feedback, I may change it when I get the chance.