@-CrystalStylinson hi! I'm sorry if it's late for you but I read your story and so far so great! There's only one thing I think you need to check up on and if you don't mind, I'm going to suggest an idea that I had. The only thing I can think of is your grammar and punctuation. That's all you need to work on. But my idea is that you need to properly set the mood. In the, I think, first chapter, Blue breaks up with her boyfriend really fast. Readers love it when you set the mood by building up anticipation. I'm not saying that the breakup was bad, maybe when Blue enters her apartment, she could be thinking about her feelings. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that better description is what would make you're story better. But I think it's great so far and that you should keep writing!
