sourpatchteens

**NOTE:** Hello. I'm so sorry for the late reply. Haven't been active much lately but I saw your request and read your book immediately. 
          
          **ACTUAL REVIEW**
          
          Now I'm going to be honest, I was quite confused the first part but then I read on to see the note and was set straight. I loved the twist of the whole diary concept. Now what I would suggest is making the first chapter more simple. For example, just using Spencer and no one else. Not even her own mother. By putting too much backstory into her character I feel like some may find the whole story just overpopulated and unnecessary. Emphasise her going away to college and emphasise the fact that she is in a place where something like a diary would reside in. Also really make a point that "Hey I found a diary" but don't make it as if it's her whole life. Make it something she is interested in slightly but is still hard set on her going off into the big world which is what you actually did. Secondly, I love how sophisticated the grammar is in this story I think it stands vocally strong. I loved the twist because tbh I wasn't expecting it. I liked how Melody is confused about her relationship and isn't sure as to why. The mysterious vibe I'm getting from Lydian is dark and makes me want to learn more about him. Overall you've started off on something that could be truly spectacular. Keep mind on it and don't draw off. I would like every now and then Spencer would snap out of reading it to tend to her own life but not make too much drama in her life because the main story is with Melody and Lydian. Change the font on Melody's diary and Spencer's POV. But twist both spencer and melody's lives together with obviously Melody's diary taking too spot. I love this and am excited for you to continue on such a unique and sophisticated story <3

sourpatchteens

I'm gonna be honest, I've had my bad days too. I've lost motivation on writing so many times. But just remember you can take breaks but try not to make them too long. I know we all have lives outside of Wattpad, but try setting goals like "100 words a day". It will help very much, even if you decide to go back and edit/trash the 100 words you worked on for the day. Glad I could help you :)
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unconditional101

Honestly this review is very very helpful. I have not been able to update the story due to personal studies but mainly because I was unsure if the story was any good. Thank you very much for the encouragement, it's extremely appreciated. And for the constructive criticism, I intend on following your advise. Your opinion and advice had been incredibly useful and it has motivated me to continue with the story. 
            
            Thnx once again
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lushafuschia

PRETTY LITTLE LIARS

OcEan_Moti0n

@thegirlwithbooks22 me too me too
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unconditional101

Yassssss! Devout fan right here
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unconditional101

Sure I'll check it out. You can read which ever one of my stories that you find interesting
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