unicorns004

Hey if you peeps can give me some tips or criticism for the book so far that would be really helpful and feel free to say what you want about my book,I don’t take things to serious so I won’t bite.

vhope-ful

How about making the dialogue more clearer? Maybe by separating them in to different paragraphs? I LIKE YOUR STORY THOUGH 
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unicorns004

Hey if you peeps can give me some tips or criticism for the book so far that would be really helpful and feel free to say what you want about my book,I don’t take things to serious so I won’t bite.

vhope-ful

How about making the dialogue more clearer? Maybe by separating them in to different paragraphs? I LIKE YOUR STORY THOUGH 
Reply