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@SmartRose14 I got the differences in the characters, I'd love to see how they interact with eachother throughout the story. Metaphors and insight into the characters minds are great but too much at one time makes you forget what's actually happening so keep that in mind too. But like you said, you like the poetic/long-winded approach and a lot of your readers might like that too :)

That's exactly what I was worried about! I did want to put emphasis on color only in Mikasa's mind so that we had something that was much more ... um, /her/ besides her fear of losing family because she hadn't in this and I was concerned about putting TOO MUCH emphasis and making the chapter boring (a reason for which I almost rewrote that chapter) and now I know I wasn't a crazy person! XD
            
            The new writing style was supposed to be more poetic and long-winded -- going into further detail than people really needed. I wanted to try it out because I've recently been reading books like this and I found it very attractive -- it allowed the author to paint without even picking up a paint brush and I admired that. So, yes, I know it's long-winded, I just hope it's not ... /too/ long xD. Usually, my writing is much more pithy. 
            
            Confusing? Ah, yes, that was a concern as well. Multiple times I believe I attempted to use a metaphor to show what was actually happening and I was really hoping people would get it but maybe it just came out like a jumble of words instead of narrative. 
            
            Something I also wonder about is if I'm making the characters unique enough and true to themselves. I have a habit of making my characters cardboard cut-outs and one-dimensional beings just to fill the holes of the plot so I was hoping to avoid that this time lol. I hope readers caught on to the differences of Mikasa and Eren's characters when their reactions to the letters were much different (Eren punched it away and Mikasa took a much less aggressive approach). 
            
            So thank you very much! This was actually really helpful! I will keep this in mind! 

@SmartRose14 hey, first of all thank you for the kind words. I really do appreciate any support especially after it's been so long since I've updated. I'm in no way an expert at writing or in a position to tell people how to do it (my own writing could definitely improve for one) but I'm thrilled you asked and it was nice of you to reach out to me. 
            
            I love the premise of your story, i think it will make for an interesting plot (it gave me PLL vibes tbh, which i love!) I also like your choice of words in terms of setting the atmosphere and the characters minds. However, i did find it a little confusing/long winded at times. I felt like the story had a slow start but it still had that air of mystery and intrigue which kept me going. I dont know how long you plan on making this story but pacing is important to keep the reader going in such a way that it shouldnt feel too rushed but also shouldn't feel like a chore. You're story has only just begun so obviously i cant say for sure how the pacing sits with me but i would love more interaction and dialogue with the characters in the present time line. I like and understand the colour theme you have going on and trying to emphasize the colour red but when Mikasa kept talking about colours and such it kind of drew me out of it (this could may well be because I'm reading at 2 in the morning though). 
            Anyway, it's an interesting story with a good concept and i hope you continue with it. If this is a different route you're taking in terms of writing style then by all means carry on, you may find a majority of your reader's - and even you - prefer it. Sorry for the essay, hope i helped. Keep writing! :)

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@Ruby_Red13 thanks for the comment i appreciate all your support and of course i will! I'm working on it :)