Urvashi <3

" You took my bullet " Ava mumbles with wide eyes and lips full of pallor. 
          
          " I don't like to owe anything. Just evened the score " Roccon softly says with a chuckle as their sights lock for a second.
          
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          The novel " Bulletproof Couple " is now available on Wattpad! 
          
          Genres:
          
          - Teen Fiction 
          - Humor 
          - Romance
          - Action
          - Thriller
          
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          HOPE YOU VISIT IT !
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/392254549?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=thisusernamistakenis

Hey Dear ❤️
          I Have Updated New Chapters Can You Plese Check it out And Vote If You Like It...?
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/387627742?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=ShadowTales04

Thankyou so much sweetie for voting let's support each other❤️

Heyooo sissy , 
          
          I assume you are a new writer just like me. How about we support eachothers books? You read and vote on mine and I'll do the same. Seal the deal by checking it out in my profile *pucchi*

Well there's more but it's like I've given you the " guide to make your story a success " like thing. I hope you will improve over time. 
          And I would also suggest re-editing your story cuz I want to see you make it a masterpiece.   
          I am pausing here both the guide and the reading hoping to comeback and read it as a "tour de force" soon. 
          
          Well, see you then.

And my suggestion to you for now is that
          1) to make the dialogues more clear as to "who is saying that specific line" .
          2) to employs your words to describe emotions more thoroughly eg. The first kiss scene should've been more emotionally engaging from the beginning like the tension etc.
          3) I see how you use multiple pov's in one same chapter Which makes you use specific header everytime. Like you have to use author's pov in between actions. I suggest you could do that in brackets instead of breaking the flow or something like that. Cuz flow is important girl.
          4)don't switch between ML and FL pov's very frequently. It doesn't give enough time to the readers to engage in the scene. Make their pov's last longer( not like extra extra detailify their thoughts but to like make almost 2 parts into one  like something)  without compromising storyline .
          5) use aesthetic pov introduction pov banners to make you story look fancy . Cuz well visuals are also important. 
          6) + you could also use chapter aesthetics (from Pinterest maybe)at the end of each chapter as a plus. 
          .....

For how it is right now? I would say that the dialogs and the transitions looks more like you are chatting with your friend rather than writing of a writer. I love how raw you seem but I'm sure you would love it if your story felt engaging for greater mass. And you should also include character aesthetics and proper introduction like their age etc in the beginning to make your story aesthetic. I am saying this not to dishearten you but to help you.  I've already said that your story is good which means that you can do a lot more with your imagination and creativity. I am here as a critic, like to criticize, I hope I am not being a bad person here cuz my intention is to help you grow. 

urvvee, i just read some of " tangled love journey" and as you've shown that you're open for constructive criticism, so that's why I am here ...
          Your story is very good and engaging but you could work on how you give that story to audience.

Hey lovely! 
          
          I'm thinking to resume eriting the next part of the story of 'REINCARNATED ROMANCE' for some time. Once some parts of 'Tangled Love Journey' gets over. Then I'll inform y'all about the new update of 'Reincarnated Romance'. 
          
          Thank you! 
          Stay Safe and Happy! ✨️

Hey lovely, I've posted new chapters of 'Twists of Fate' and a new chapter of 'Tangled Love Journey' on my Scrollstack account (which you'll get it on my bio). 
          
          Go and check out! 
          
          Love, Urvi ♡