TormentaXOXO
Hello, I was wondering if you would be interested in doing a read, follow, vote, and comment for the same thing in return. In this deal we would both read, vote and comment on each others works and also follow each other. :) we would also add each others stories to our reading lists to make sure we get updates. This exchange helps both of our stories get out there which boosts its popularity! Thank you so much, yours truly,
-Tormenta ️
TormentaXOXO
@user34069307 Make sure to comment your thoughts on the story as well as I do it for you. :)
user34069307
The presented story conveys deep feelings of competitiveness, jealousy and fear from two sides of a family system. The main character feels the great influence of the perfect brother on her life, and this creates a feeling of rejection and worthlessness.
There are many advantages in this story: it succeeds in conveying the inner tension of the character and dealing with life in the shadow of another person. The description of the event in the yard conveys well the feeling of unease and complex family dynamics.
However, more details can be added that will deepen the characters and further insights. For example, it is possible to present moments in which the main character manages to feel a bond with her family, or even reveal more about what caused the relationship between her and her brother to deteriorate.
Ultimately, the story offers a window into the lives of the characters and tackles complex issues that reflect the human struggle to find our place in the world.