Hi vandana631 and everyone else who see this.
I really sorry for just writing something hear in your profile, but as I read your story 'Echoes of sin!' Is very good have a lot of potential in it. But, but you yous a lot of time (darkened eyes) or (sharp) what us not a big of a problem, just it used to many times, what makes the story some kind of way boring. I recommend using synonyms, there are a lot of websites that give multiple versions of a word. Or find words different words for the appearance of a strong face, what shape is it, round, square, how deep and sharp is the edge is our facial bone, and similar. You should only consider small details so that you don't repeat words and sentences.
If you think you might need help, I'd be happy to try to help If I can, and you want. I just started writing not long ago and I'm not perfect either, but I notice things form a different perspective.
My Gmail: zoeurbin17@gmail.com if you want to ask or anything in private
