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Yall do realise i will adopt or re write a book if yall ask

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To everyone reading Legacy of Vredesmerth—if you’ve felt its weight, its horror, and its quiet heartbreak—then you should take a look at Deathbound. It’s just as raw. Just as terrifying. Maybe even darker.
          
          It carries the same soul: grief, madness, and the kind of dread that lingers long after you’ve turned the page.
          
          You can find Deathbound on my profile. If you’ve made it this far, I think you’re ready.
          
          Let the shadows guide you. You already know the way.

UNKNOWNONESTUDIO

Can you please read my book.
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/394167709?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=UNKNOWNONESTUDIO

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@UNKNOWNONESTUDIO The writing is good, but it needs more world-building. Flesh out the fights more; the goblin fight needs more combat moves. After introducing the tyrant, provide a backstory. Also, add more world-building details, as the world feels generic. Consider including a beginning chapter summarizing the world. Create new creatures, and use
             names like "Vredesmerth," which is simply a combination of "evil," "suffering," "pain," and "fire" in Norse.
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