@versazex hey!!! Okay so tbh its normal to feel this way about your writing but can I just say I absolutely enjoyed the book!! (Which is rare for me ).
And i think you have a very intriguing plot, the relationship b/w val an her family is heartbreaking and makes you want to root for her sm! You've done a great job portraying that
And personally I didn't find the Halloween chapter cringe, if I had any complaints it would be that I wanted val and zekes interaction to be longer lol >_< and i just love their interactions sm esp in the newer book where he does almost pit her against them beacuse it is realistic with how awfully they've treated her.
If anything i would just want more of her fam realizing how awful they've been to her and Val like actually standing up for herself like I couldn't wait to see her with zeke just so l could enjoy how much it would piss everyone else off
I really hope you continue it!