Hey, you have written it quite well.I am writing for the first time, so i think it may be rude to give advice. But if i was to give suggestions , i think whatever you have written is sort of typical, so try adding a twist to it or maybe create some suspense. I read that in chp 1 you have written that it was in the 12th grade , so of course there will be a lot of study pressure. Try including it. I would also recommend to keep chapters short, so that the readers dont find it long and boring. I think you are going great. These are just some suggestions dont take them very seriously.
