Hey Lexi~~First of all welcome to Wattpad (6 days only). I hope you find this site as wild and wonderful as I have these past few years. I like what you're doing with "Asoen Gove". You have a good narrative voice and have set up some believable main characters. What I believe your story needs to get more readers returning to it and turning pages is some good old fashioned sexxual tension brewing beneath the surface. Yeah that.
Don't forget your readers are 89% female age between 14-44, and are hormonally curious. They pretty much use fiction as a secret outlet for their passions and fantasies--don't dissapoint them. Give them what they're looking for--chapter after chapter.
As we girls know the anticipation of sexx and romance is almost a s powerful a getting it. So always tease them into the next chapter for more. What your story lacks is the inner feelings and desires by your characters expressed to the reader more explicitly.
I'm sending you a short story of mine--just 4 parts, to demonstrate this. Trust me it's helped a lot of budding writers get more reads and votes on Wattpad.
Now you should know as a warning this story is "hot," In fact, Part 4 was given a "R-Private" rating (woo woo!) and is intended by WP just for followers--right.
But pay no mind to that, I'm sending you the naughty last link as a random act of kindness--and tutorial for you :)
(Best to read this last section while home alone!)
Just let me know what you thought of the story.
https://www.wattpad.com/52450827-a-walk-in-the-countryside-part-4
https://www.wattpad.com/story/16999941-a-walk-in-the-countryside
Feel free to message me anytime.
~~Califia
