HockeyDragon183
Hello! I am a bit new to Wattpad. And I made my first book! I have read all three of your books! They are really good and I was wondering if you could give me feedback on how it’s going so far! If not it is ok! I understand if you don’t want to or you don’t have the the time! Have a great day/night!
HockeyDragon183
@wattup3214 ok! I will be sure to use this feed-back! It will help alot! Thank you so much! I mean it, also your fan fictions are great! I kinda forgot to vote haha. But anyway, like I said before, I really appreciate this feed-back! Have a great day/night!
wattup3214
@HockeyDragon183 Right, I can give you advice here if you don't mind then. Firstly, I think you need to proofread your work to minimise the grammatical and spelling errors in your chapters. Secondly, I think you need to make clear which parts of the story are conversation and the thoughts of Leo to make the chapter look more organised, and this could be done by maybe using bold or italic fonts to represent thoughts, and regular text to represent normal conversation and descriptions. Make sure you also touch on the appearances of how the dragon spirits look like and the other OCs you used in the book to allow readers to visualise how your OCs look like. Try to use contractions to make the story easier to read (like will not can be shortened to won't). Other than that, I like the concept you've implemented in the story so far. It's a very creative concept. I look forward to seeing how the story will turn out and I'm glad that you enjoyed my fanfictions. Thanks for taking the time to read them.
HockeyDragon183
@wattup3214 Hello! I unfortunately do not. I have never touched any of that kind of stuff my whole life! If you are not able to give me feedback because of that I completely understand! I apologize for this inconvenience. It has been a rule for my family so I don't get addicted to my phone. And It works pretty well! :P
