Hello, I've been reading the King's Desire book and I think it's got some real potential. It's very similar to another book I've been reading, called A Lover's Quarrel by @Reggabear. I suggest you try reading her book to get ideas, as well as a way to try and make your book unique. I've been working with her to edit her book On My Own, as well. If you would like help with editing, I can offer my help. I don't expect anything in return. I've found I like to edit. Best of luck.