xChubbyBunnyx

@TheWANTED12 thank you so much babe! This is my first story so your comment is really helpful! and sure, I'll fan back :) thank you for your advice as well :) xx

TheWANTED12

Hello I have just finished reading your story and first I would like to say well done! It is a really intriguing story! The only criticism I have is be careful on your words e.g 'has' and 'as' it can sometimes confuse what you are trying to say. The other thing is maybe consider a sequel? For instance one set in the future to see how shes coping without Nathan?. Also make sure you don't list events after events for example she was in an accident and then another accident took place do you know what I mean? Other than that well done! And if you ever need help or stuck from ideas let me know and I'll help! P.s fanback please:-)xx

TheWANTED12

Hello I have just finished reading your story and first I would like to say well done! It is a really intriguing story! The only criticism I have is be careful on your words e.g 'has' and 'as' it can sometimes confuse what you are trying to say. The other thing is maybe consider a sequel? For instance one set in the future to see how shes coping without Nathan?. Also make sure you don't list events after events for example she was in an accident and then another accident took place do you know what I mean? Other than that well done! And if you ever need help or stuck from ideas let me know and I'll help! P.s fanback please:-)xx

TheWANTED12

Hello I have just finished reading your story and first I would like to say well done! It is a really intriguing story! The only criticism I have is be careful on your words e.g 'has' and 'as' it can sometimes confuse what you are trying to say. The other thing is maybe consider a sequel? For instance one set in the future to see how shes coping without Nathan?. Also make sure you don't list events after events for example she was in an accident and then another accident took place do you know what I mean? Other than that well done! And if you ever need help or stuck from ideas let me know and I'll help! P.s fanback please:-)xx