Not even exaggerating, your character like something that already exists in panels. The way you handle emotion and pacing makes it ridiculously easy to visualize. I work on turning writing like this into actual covers and illustrated for authors, and yours is exactly the kind that translates well. If you ever want to see how it would look visually, you can reach me on
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