@xmarix356
Hiii i dont know if youd be interested in either of the fics i’ve written but id love any feedback you have on them so far!! ive been writing these for months now and finally happy with them
Okay so I wrote my thoughts in one of ur stories already feel free to apply it or not lol if you wanna ask me more questions or just chat am right here anyways I’ll see the other one tomorrow ✌️
Heyyy <3 I wanted to thank you for trying my fic. It's the first time I'm writing one, and it's really motivating. If you think that any topic is handled immaturely, feel free to mssg me or comment on the chapter. Thank You <3
Hey! I really like the plot you’re building—it’s interesting and easy to follow. One thing that could make your story hit even harder is how you write emotions.
Right now, you sometimes state them directly (like saying a character is sad or scared). That works, but it doesn’t always pull the reader in.
You could try showing the emotion instead—like describing what the character feels physically or how they react. For example, instead of “he was sad so he cried,” you could describe things like his chest feeling tight, his thoughts racing, or how he couldn’t fall back asleep.
It helps the reader actually feel what the character is going through instead of just being told. Your story already has a strong idea, so this would just make it more immersive.
Do you want line by line tips or just in general? I mean I don’t mean every line and this is your story so I don’t want to over step or something
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@Xxxxx0xxxxxX holissss la verdad no utilizó wattpad a menudo ahorita es que me puse a ver todas mis notificaciones