xmarix356

Genuinely I forgot the most important part on the chapter “Champions Gala” it’s so funny I can’t lol! Anyways I updated it now! For those that already read it please bear with me T^T

xmarix356

Soooooo I am going to continue “Did I mention I was born rotten” but I am lacking inspiration at the moment and I don’t want to force the story SO I’ve decide to start another story while I get my ideas organized so that I can continue “Did I mention I was born rotten”!!! Thanks so much for the support guys

thatonebisexualbitch

@xmarix356  omg! yay!
            and take ya time gurl 
            we'll be waiting for as long as u take 
            :3 <3
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thatonebisexualbitch

hey !
          so like i recently started to write a fanfiction and i was wondering if you could read the first part.....its like really short. But its just cause i want to see if it would pull tyhe reader in or if i should rewrite it. You dont have to read it tbh. Its jist if you want to and if you have time <3

Cass1eB333

Hiii i dont know if youd be interested in either of the fics i’ve written but id love any feedback you have on them so far!! ive been writing these for months now and finally happy with them

xmarix356

Okay so I wrote my thoughts in one of ur stories already feel free to apply it or not lol if you wanna ask me more questions or just chat am right here  anyways I’ll see the other one tomorrow ✌️
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xmarix356

lol
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Cass1eB333

@xmarix356 omg period perfect timing lol
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Drarry_is_life

Heyyy <3 I wanted to thank you for trying my fic. It's the first time I'm writing one, and it's really motivating. If you think that any topic is handled immaturely, feel free to mssg me or comment on the chapter. Thank You <3

xmarix356

Hey! I really like the plot you’re building—it’s interesting and easy to follow. One thing that could make your story hit even harder is how you write emotions.
            
            Right now, you sometimes state them directly (like saying a character is sad or scared). That works, but it doesn’t always pull the reader in.
            
            You could try showing the emotion instead—like describing what the character feels physically or how they react. For example, instead of “he was sad so he cried,” you could describe things like his chest feeling tight, his thoughts racing, or how he couldn’t fall back asleep.
            
            It helps the reader actually feel what the character is going through instead of just being told. Your story already has a strong idea, so this would just make it more immersive.
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xmarix356

Do you want line by line tips or just in general? I mean I don’t mean every line and this is your story so I don’t want to over step or something
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