Vicki

Sorry for the double post...my phone is stupid 

Gothic people don't cut themselves, that might be kind of offensive to some people who follow that style. People who cut themselves are in need of major attention and help, so don't joke about it 
          
          That being said, I like your story, though it has a few grammatical errors, as unedited stories often do (I make simple mistakes all of the time) and it's a little run along when it comes to the sentences. Fix it up a little and you've got a diamond that's less rough ;)

Gothic people don't cut themselves, that might be kind of offensive to some people who follow that style. People who cut themselves are in need of major attention and help, so don't joke about it 
          
          That being said, I like your story, though it has a few grammatical errors, as unedited stories often do (I make simple mistakes all of the time) and it's a little run along when it comes to the sentences. Fix it up a little and you've got a diamond that's less rough ;)