YouTube_CreepyPastas
Hello. I don't know of your account is still active or not, but I just wanted to drop by and say that the story you have written is very good, I enjoyed it very much. There were just enough twists and turns to keep me guessing, but one hell of a good story line to following along and form theories off of. I hope that wherever you are, whatever you are doing, that you are doing okay. I also hope that you are still writing, not as in "I hope you're writing a sequel" but as I in hope you still enjoy writing for yourself, because you are really good at it so it'd be a shame to hear that you have stopped.
Have a good one!
YouTube_CreepyPastas
I'm also guessing that from Matt's reaction when he saw Nate back in the US, he clearly knows something is wrong and that Natemare is real. Was the events of "Mangled" Canon in this story, but Nate doesn't remember? Is that why Matt is so nervous around him?
YouTube_CreepyPastas
For some reason, it is the opposite with me. I say "I will write a short story," and then 60,000 words later I'm just staring at the screen with regret after realising how much editing I need to do afterwards XD I think I'm just incapable of making small stories.
But yeah, your story was great! I think my favorite part of all was the original build up, starting with the small hints that something was wrong with Jack. I always think the subtle hints are the coolest ones, because when you go and reread a story afterwards, you can pick out all of the moments of foreshadowing and have those realisation moments.
I liked the idea of the triggers, too! I messed around with a concept like that myself so it was cool to see someone else do the same but with a different take. So if Jack's trigger is attention being given to Anti, Mark's is anger, Nate's is fear, then what was Felix's supposed to be? Obviously his alter ego never really made too big of an appearance, but did he still try and use a specific trigger?
Also, something which I don't think was quite answered in the story was Matt. He's obviously got a bit more knowledge about everything than what he is letting on, and considering in Anti's memories there is a scene where there is someone who looks very similar to Matt, I feel like he's defiantly hiding something from the rest of the group... but that's just a theory. A gaaaAAAME THEORY.
xxXToasterXxx
@YouTube_CreepyPastas Hi! I don't really use Wattpad too much these days but I do still occasionally check up on my story because it makes me happy to know that people are still enjoying it :). I am definitely still writing in my free time, and a rewrite is definitely still on my radar, it's just not on my list of priorities for now, and probably won't be for a while. I'll be going to college this fall so maybe I'll have some time after I get settled into dorms and everything. Anyways, I'm very happy that you enjoyed it so much! It was especially difficult for me because I'm my specialty is short stories; I'm just not that great at making long storylines. Thanks for all the love!