Hey, nice poetry :D i think. maybe you could try to be a little bit more subtle bwt what is actuli happening in the poetry, too me it seems a little bit obvious, maybe more emotions and sounds rather than just stating? but some bits are gawjus, you definatly have a talent xD youv got my vote!!
could you do me a favour and vote and comment on broken angel? it would mean alot ^-^ keep writing -- Daisy* xx