yamamajaya123

Hello!! I posted a story about chocolate or something because I entered a contest so I'd be happy if you would read it and tell if something feels off thank uuu

yamamajaya123

hello! i felt like something is always off about my story "My Life In a Unknown Novel" so if theres anything bothering u about the story, pls dont be shy and tell me! thank you

yamamajaya123

@kennie-chan thank you this helped a lot <3
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kennie-chan

Hey! It’s already been a long while since I read the story since I was waiting for more chapters to be updated, so if I’ll be relying on my not so good memory. Also, it’s just my personal opinion and I still like the story very much. If we’re talking about what feels off, then I’ll probably say the communication? Yeah, sometimes it’s hard to know who is speaking. The story’s progress or flow, it gets sometimes complicated to understand what’s happening. 
            I think that’s that, anyway that’s what I’ve noticed so far.
            I hope this helped and have a nice day author.
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awthatsweet

Hello, I am looking forward to your works. Btw, do you have any social media that can be followed?

awthatsweet

@UnknownUser78429 ah i see, hope you will make one so that i can follow you^^
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yamamajaya123

@awthatsweet and thank you
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yamamajaya123

@awthatsweet not rlly, but I'm planning to do so
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