michelle_luv

Hi I'm Michelle, writer of Beneath A Heavy Sky(Jujutsu Kaisen). 
          
          I've noticed your engagement with my book. I'm extrenly grateful for it. Thankyou so much for supporting it. I had never thought it would receive the slightest recognition but still wrote it cuz I didn't want my ideas to go in vain. I really appreciate it. 
          
          Could you please provide me with some feedback and any criticism so I can enhance its level even further. I would like to know your thoughts on it and areas of improvement. I would really appreciate it. 
          
          Thankyou for your support!

michelle_luv

@michelle_luv Thanks a lot. I appreciate that u liked it and would work where I could improve. In fact, on reading the chapters myself I occasionally spotted such things but having a third party opinion is always better and better analysed. Thankyou so muchhhh.
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yangjwonily

@michelle_luv  I would love to!! 
            I really enjoyed reading ur recent chapter! And I'll base my judgment on tht. Here's what I think:
            
            What you really did well:
            - Kiyomi's technique is absolute cinema fr. The reveal was amazing and everything clicked together perfectly.
            - The dialogue sounds really cool and fits the characters well.
            - The chemistry between Satoru and Kiyomi is perfect. Their banter feels natural and enjoyable.
            - The ending is killing me (in the best way) It wrapped up the chapter really well and left me wanting more.
            
            Areas you could improve:
            - There are some repeated words especially "the woman" in this chapter. Using different descriptions would make the writing flow better.
            - There are a few small grammar mistakes and awkward sentences here and there. A quick proofreading pass would fix most of them.
            - The villains could have a stronger identity. Giving them more distinct personalities or mannerisms would make them more memorable.
            
            Overall, I genuinely enjoyed it. The action was exciting, the technique reveal was one of my favorite parts, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
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Caamila5

Hi any suggestions am looking for single inferno 5 to read?

yangjwonily

@Caamila5 There's also-
            buzz, single'a inferno 5 by  @MiKYEON
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yangjwonily

@Caamila5  Yes, I've a lot like-
            Season of memories, singlesinferno 5 by @twinkchester
            ICON☆ singlesinferno 5 by @Self0Deficit
            Singles Inferno 5 by @writtenby_elara
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