yoonbieitzy

yoonjin >>>> 

yoonbieitzy

give me good bttm yoongi/hetalia books i’m boredddddd 

yoonbieitzy

@yanyanaddict thank you so much! 
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coconutz11

https://my.w.tt/belcvRfut2 i think this is one. it's been a bit since i've read it but i know it's good 
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yoonbieitzy

not to be annoying but can you guys check out my new story? i want to know your guy’s opinions and how i can improve

coconutz11

Definitely! I haven't seen it before today 
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nicholinecj

@plzcumtinue i don't know if i would be in a position to judge this since i am not a kpop fan and i know almost nothing about bts but yeah
            
            the good stuff: a pretty good plot so far. does not seem clichèd and includes a lot of useful information/character backstories which would help in the plot development
            
            the not-so-good stuff: 1. quite a number of grammatical errors. grammar errors could affect the story a lot by confusing readers. 2. too many timeline jumps. this is also confusing for readers since readers would end up wondering which timeline are they following. try to make the story in a chronological order, allowing only a flashback/flashforward every 2 or 3 chapters.
            
            hope this helps :)
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