yoonsmainhoe

Please give my story a chance and tell me what you think
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/181406838

EthrealPrincess

Hey, you're book so far is good. Its very descriptive and it paints a good picture. Also, its a book i'd like to read. 
          The only thing you might need to work on is your punctuation. Other than that, good job. I'm not really a proffesional though, so don't completely take my word for it. 
          Have a good week :)