zearph-

Ok, so been a while since I posted on here, and I decided to as my last one was from over a year ago.
          	
          	So I've been working on my DxD Story with a friend, I've almost finished my first arc, I've finally got a writing style I personally like, and I've improved my art a lot.
          	
          	I have chapter 8 of it almost done, and with the rate I'm going, I should have it done soon.
          	
          	Once it's done, I plan on completely remaking my Fate/Incursio story as I've been neglecting it a lot.
          	
          	And I mean completely remake it. I'm not using any of the old parts, as I recently re-read it, and I dislike how I have it currently.
          	
          	 I'll break down what I did wrong
          	
          	One, I tried to make a unique start when the manga ending works perfectly without me having to add anything to it, as Tatsumi is a dragon at the end of the manga, so it can be assumed he has the lifespan of one now, meaning he will be walking the world long after the revolution. 
          	
          	So thats enough of what I need without me adding to it to be unique.
          	
          	Next, I tried to imitate a style I wasn't good with, and I added way too many details that are not needed, which takes away from the pacing. All and all, it was a complete mistake on my end, and the previous version was better 
          	
          	So I'm posting this to ask a question: Do any of you have suggestions for things you want me to add or take away from in the story, as I want to hear your opinions.
          	
          	This also goes for the dxd one, if you have any suggestions.

grandmega154

@zearph- i it would make four story's (soul land 2 story would be the 4th) i say you are looking good
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zearph-

@Arbiter3670 | That is honestly really tempting as the story line Tatsumi would go through dealing with the singularities and lost belts would be cool to see and a complete contrast of the story line he would go through in Fate/apocrypha making the grand order one unique 
          	  
          	  So I might do that soon as after I fix fate/incursio as I still do have the fate go transcript saved so it won't be hard to make.
          	  
          	  So I'll see about making that soon, thank you for the suggestion.
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Arbiter3670

None for the fate/incursio I really liked it also have you thought of doing a Tatsumi x fate/ grand order where Tatsumi gets transported to Chaldea and you know the rest? @zearph-
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grandmega154

first nice to see the fate story back and second said story still have complete

grandmega154

@zearph- np as it been so long that we all forgot it was marked as complete
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zearph-

@grandmega154, thanks for telling me, as I forgot I marked it as complete
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zearph-

Ok, so been a while since I posted on here, and I decided to as my last one was from over a year ago.
          
          So I've been working on my DxD Story with a friend, I've almost finished my first arc, I've finally got a writing style I personally like, and I've improved my art a lot.
          
          I have chapter 8 of it almost done, and with the rate I'm going, I should have it done soon.
          
          Once it's done, I plan on completely remaking my Fate/Incursio story as I've been neglecting it a lot.
          
          And I mean completely remake it. I'm not using any of the old parts, as I recently re-read it, and I dislike how I have it currently.
          
           I'll break down what I did wrong
          
          One, I tried to make a unique start when the manga ending works perfectly without me having to add anything to it, as Tatsumi is a dragon at the end of the manga, so it can be assumed he has the lifespan of one now, meaning he will be walking the world long after the revolution. 
          
          So thats enough of what I need without me adding to it to be unique.
          
          Next, I tried to imitate a style I wasn't good with, and I added way too many details that are not needed, which takes away from the pacing. All and all, it was a complete mistake on my end, and the previous version was better 
          
          So I'm posting this to ask a question: Do any of you have suggestions for things you want me to add or take away from in the story, as I want to hear your opinions.
          
          This also goes for the dxd one, if you have any suggestions.

grandmega154

@zearph- i it would make four story's (soul land 2 story would be the 4th) i say you are looking good
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zearph-

@Arbiter3670 | That is honestly really tempting as the story line Tatsumi would go through dealing with the singularities and lost belts would be cool to see and a complete contrast of the story line he would go through in Fate/apocrypha making the grand order one unique 
            
            So I might do that soon as after I fix fate/incursio as I still do have the fate go transcript saved so it won't be hard to make.
            
            So I'll see about making that soon, thank you for the suggestion.
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Arbiter3670

None for the fate/incursio I really liked it also have you thought of doing a Tatsumi x fate/ grand order where Tatsumi gets transported to Chaldea and you know the rest? @zearph-
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grandmega154

hey man question in tensura the fallen like dino did they always had their material body's?

grandmega154

@zearph- also very happy you will always to find to be on wattpad man despite being busy
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grandmega154

@zearph- first its okay man its happen man as you will always find time to get on wattpad and second not that i can think of right now and third very good man
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zearph-

@grandmega154  @grandmega154 Oh, also, I'm going to completely remake my Fate Apocrypha fanfiction with my current writing style that makes the fic flow better, as currently there is an overabundance of description not needed, same with the prologue, as it would be better if I remove it and focus on the horror of the manga ending
            
            So I want to know if there's anything you want to add, as it's still a fic you suggested
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grandmega154

Hey man how ate you?

grandmega154

@zearph- first good point on that second maybe i will and third which one are you reading from one to four? (not counting five due well its isekai)
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zearph-

@grandmega154 it's better to see how it's written in novel form as it gives me an idea on how to write it in my fanfiction it also explains the power a bit better 
            
            I recomend reading it if you get the Chance
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grandmega154

@zearph- first that would explains so much why second that is good and third novels i thought you would read the manhua version of course there is nothing wrong with reading the novel at all
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grandmega154

hey man i don't normally ask this but would making tatsumi (agk) x soul land 2 (manhua version) story?

grandmega154

@zearph- how is rereading soul land 2 (manhua) doing for you?
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grandmega154

@zearph- oh good I know I place to well to read manhwa soul land 2 is at kissmanga because is about to have beast tide
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zearph-

@grandmega154 | honestly yeah I'll do that as that sounds like fun to make as I haven't gotten into that series for a good while and it could be interesting
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