zeelzenaxxoneD

hey guys my second part.of story  is out Plz read it and give me review....... Plz read...... thnxx to all my followers...... 

Fineartsgeek1

Thanks for following! I can't wait to see what you have written! 

zeelzenaxxoneD

I'll see about my mistake 
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zeelzenaxxoneD

thnxx that means a lot 
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Fineartsgeek1

I like how you started with a type of great suspension that grabbed my attention quickly! There were some spelling/grammar errors and some choppy sentences that need to be fixed. Other than that great start! 
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