" I read the first 3 chapters of demon instruction manual. In my opinion I think there is alot going on in just these 3 chapters and its all happening so fast. Don't get me wrong, I think it all makes sense and everything,but I feel you need to slow down a little in the upcomming pages. Because at this point your main character is going through a few different emotions right now. He's in love, he's kickin ass, he just witnessed his first murder, some creepy demon guy is teloporting him to all these random locations, and he just realized that he can transform into a demon. Thats alot to take in; in 3 chapters. What I'm trying to say is that I like it and I love the idea, but I truly feel you need to slow down." -Colt
