zigzagYEAR

Royal awards shout out
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/1309501151?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading_part_end&wp_uname=zigzagYEAR&wp_originator=c9zc5HXO7o%2BOc3yzdEHXp8CzkMp0%2BKB%2B9DGkZdkTXZjfp0%2FKcmvUDHucba3W80GBSxK78G8bpm%2FctP2yaUDHe%2F7HGTGq8xXRWprvRCoIZSyWWJ619WBqBSCMlbaqQymj

EmmeMoore86

@zigzagYEAR Hey! I meant to write you feedback yesterday but I got distracted!
          	  Overall:
          	  This is my favorite type of story! I love a good adventure romance. The story is intriguing and I love that you aren't giving everything away at once and keeping  Ziggy a bit of a mystery.  I wanted to keep reading to figure her out. I think your story really shines when she and Cain are together. She has some sass which is fun to read.
          	  A few suggestions that you can take or leave:
          	  I thought there were a few sections that needed a little more show than tell, especially in the first part. I wanted to get more in Cain's head. Maybe he is just really macho, but he seemed really blasé about being capsized by giant whales and stranded on an island. For example when he is swimming you say he never wants to swim again, but I didn't really feel it. It was more telling than showing. You could add more of his feelings and head space and I think that would help! 
          	  
          	  It was an enjoyable read and I wasn't bored! Thanks for sharing!
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zigzagYEAR

Royal awards shout out
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/1309501151?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading_part_end&wp_uname=zigzagYEAR&wp_originator=c9zc5HXO7o%2BOc3yzdEHXp8CzkMp0%2BKB%2B9DGkZdkTXZjfp0%2FKcmvUDHucba3W80GBSxK78G8bpm%2FctP2yaUDHe%2F7HGTGq8xXRWprvRCoIZSyWWJ619WBqBSCMlbaqQymj

EmmeMoore86

@zigzagYEAR Hey! I meant to write you feedback yesterday but I got distracted!
            Overall:
            This is my favorite type of story! I love a good adventure romance. The story is intriguing and I love that you aren't giving everything away at once and keeping  Ziggy a bit of a mystery.  I wanted to keep reading to figure her out. I think your story really shines when she and Cain are together. She has some sass which is fun to read.
            A few suggestions that you can take or leave:
            I thought there were a few sections that needed a little more show than tell, especially in the first part. I wanted to get more in Cain's head. Maybe he is just really macho, but he seemed really blasé about being capsized by giant whales and stranded on an island. For example when he is swimming you say he never wants to swim again, but I didn't really feel it. It was more telling than showing. You could add more of his feelings and head space and I think that would help! 
            
            It was an enjoyable read and I wasn't bored! Thanks for sharing!
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