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3.The Boss

AUTHOR - Taexxychacck
Reviewed on: 09/09/2021
The chapter's I Read: 5
Review Word count: 770
Payment: Nob,
So I asked you to follow me,
read my story and comment, so I will also get to know the insights of my story and rectify my mistakes, but you only voted. I want readers, not reads or votes :(

Title : (3/10)

I can't say, I haven't seen any story on this topic. It's relevant to your story but I prefer you to go unique.

Cover : (5/10)

The cover picture is good, you have made it look classic but the font isn't clear, it's not centred, the word has been cut out from the visibility. I guess you got the size of the cover wrong, I prefer you to use Canva for Wattpad covers. The Author name isn't mentioned to avoid chances of plagiarism, I insist to add that.

Blurb : (3/10)

As I have mentioned in the previous review, a blurb must be concise and should give out specific details that make your story distinct from other stories.

Your blurb is just some dialogue from your book and it only gives me an idea about a nerd girl × cold boss, and what would happen if they fell in love
This is vague, I don't see any exciting or intriguing things there and honest speaking there are hundreds of stories of this kind in Wattpad just as a Jungkook fanfic and there are many mistakes :(
This is an example of how I might re-write your blurb,

Y/n, a beautiful savy young woman being caught with a workaholic boss Jungkook, grows up her feelings for him and when the tea spills unexpectedly it gets all her hope ended in vain.
But just then the fate gets into play.

Plot : (9/20)

As I said before this seems like a cliche story as of what I read till now, but that doesn't mean you shouldn't write a story like this.

I just insist you to think of ideas on how to make your story a unique one by giving the characters some emotional pain or by giving them some physical weaknesses, it solely depends on your creativity and I believe you are capable. I love your humour sense and the way you write it in a dialogue format, it is easy to read and I appreciate it.

Grammar/ Punctuation : (2/10)

According to me, this is the first and foremost thing you need to focus on, in the whole review. Your English is very lame, I could see so many spelling mistakes and misplaced punctuations.

I guess your first language isn't English, but that doesn't mean you can make such silly mistakes. Making mistakes on writing 'you' as u 'Please' as 'plz' Noo noo don't use such short forms, it's completely wrong. As an author, you need to give your readers qualified work and you are worth doing it, why not then?

Hook : (10/10)

Though it seems like a cliche story and the plots are guessable, it's still got the reader on their toes.

Character Development : (7/10)

All characters hold distinct traits and are acting according to it, but I don't see much character arch yet.

Voice : (9/10)

Every character has their unique voice and I could see their inner monologue.

Flow : (7/10)

The story flow doesn't seem slow but I would prefer you to bring out some intriguing actions.

Total Score : (45/100)

Overall Remark :

Please don't get disheartened by the score, I could see your potent while reading the story, you have got a great sense of humour and your writing style is unique.

You just need to focus more on your spelling and work on creating a unique plot, this can be flourished by reading. Once you start reading a lot, you will get to know the sentence formation and the unique voice of every author which would help you create your own.

As a budding writer mistakes are inevitable and I have done plenty too, so don't worry about that keep working on increasing your skills and very soon you will succeed.

Thank you so much for signing in and giving me a chance to review your astounding story. Just look for the mistakes I have mentioned above, I hope you find them helpful.

You are always welcome to re-submit your book after rectifying and polishing the previous mistakes.

If you have any queries on any topics I mentioned about feel free to comment or PM, I will be glad to help you in all the ways I can.

Purple love :)
Sowsow