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4. Cold Boss

AUTHOR - ch3rryjimin
Reviewed on: 19/09/2021
The chapter's I Read: 7
Review Word count: 580
Payment: Yes.

Title : (5/10)

The title is related to the story but I would prefer you to do a little more work and give a unique title.

Cover : (9/10)

Your cover is perfect. I like the black and white vibe with an apt Jimin's picture. It's aesthetic and classic.

Blurb : (02/10)

Your blurb is very vague and un luring, just by claiming your story non- cliche doesn't make it non-cliche, you need to show. If you have got distinct plots in your story write it down in the blurb, you aren't giving a spoiler just giving the readers why they should choose your story. All the best!

Plot : (08/20)

So, once again you claim your story as non-cliche but as of what I have read till now, I don't accept with you as I didn't see any prominent distinct things.

If Jimin had a wrecking past, which got him cold try to give a glimpse about that in a few chapters, holding all the secrets together and breaking it off in a go, can make your reader's confused. So keep giving out a slight glimpse of where your story is moving to.

Grammar / Punctuation: (06/10)

Your spelling was good but you need to focus on grammar and punctuation. I like how you write your story in dialogue form, it makes reading easy and comfortable. I prefer you to re-read your story as I saw slight mistakes here and there, editing them off and correcting your punctuation and grammar can turn your story perfect based on grammar/punctuation.

Character Development: (10/10)

All the characters starting from the main one's to the supporting one's are developed well. Kudos!

Hook: (10/10)

Woo, Yeah! The way you end your chapters are literally amazing. I couldn't help but slide to the next, next chapters.

Voice: (10/10)

Every character has their unique perspective portrayed clearly and lively.

Flow: (07/10)

Your story flow is pretty slow, as I didn't see any heart throbbing, tiptoeing incidents till what I have read but I hope things would speed up.

Total Score : (65/100)

Overall Remark :

Your writing style is amazing and you have got a great humour sense, the only thing you need to focus on is to identify what makes your stand out and move the story according to it, it might be tough but I am sure you will get it.

A next is your grammar, punctuation and some sentences are made quite complex, so I would like you to look into it and edit them off, I guess the author's first language isn't English if that then keep reading, reading and reading only that will help you write better.

For now, your story might not be called the best but am sure in the future you will be called the best author, work hard and chase progression.

Thank you so much for signing in and giving me a chance to review your astounding story. Just look for the mistakes I have mentioned above, I hope you find them helpful.

You are always welcome to re-submit your book after rectifying and polishing the previous mistakes.

If you have any queries on any topics I mentioned above feel free to Comment or PM, I will be glad to help you in all the ways I can.

Purple love :)
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